PLEASE TAKE NOTES OF MY LAST CORRECTIONS AND RE-WRITE THE PARAGRAPH ON THIS PAGE. REMEMBER YOU MUSTN'T DELETE THE ABOVE
GZ
Hi ! My name is Lorenzo, I' m 16 years old and I attend the third class in a High School called Liceo Dal Piaz, in Feltre. My hobbies are listening to music, playing videogames and watching football matches. I'm friendly, reliable and I love meeting new people. I' m a goalkeeper in a team named Plavis, which is the name of a local association, too. I love travelling: I have been in big cities like London, Barcelona, Munich, Rome and Milan. I can speak English, Spanish and I am very good at sports. In the future I will travel to the USA because I love that country for football, basketball and for its culture. I haven' t got any working experiences but I do the best I can in everything I do.
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HI LORENZO, I PASTED YOUR PROFILE WITH MY CORRECTIONS: MISTAKES ARE INTO BRACKETS AND I AM USING CAPITAL LETTERS FOR MY CORRECTIONS AS I HAVE NO OTHER MEANS AT THE MOMENT. PLEASE CORRECT AND COMPLETE YOUR PARAGRAPH.
ReplyDeleteHi ! My name is Lorenzo , I' m 16 years old and I attend the third class (at)IN A High School CALLED ...., in Feltre.
My hobbies are LISTENING music, play... with videogames and (see)WATCHING (the) football matches.
I' m a goalkeeper in A (Society) TEAM NAMED ...., SPONSORED BY "Plavis", A LOCAL ASSOCIATION.
I love travel... : I have been in (important)BIG cities LIKE London, Barcelona , Munich , Rome and Milan. In the future I will travel (in)TO THE USA because I love that (Countries) COUNTRY for football , basketball and FOR ITS culture.
I' m friendly, reliable and I love meet... new people.
YOU SHOULD ADD SOMETHING ABOUT YOUR ABILITIES (WHAT YOU CAN DO, WHAT YOU ARE GOOD AT) AND SOME EXPERIENCES THAT COULD PROVE YOUR SKILLS
GZ
Hi ! My name is Lorenzo, I' m 16 years old and I attend the third class in High School called Dal Piaz in Feltre.
DeleteMy hobbies are listening music, play with videogames and watching the football matches.
I' m a goalkeeper in a team named Plavis a local association.
I love travel : I have been in London, Barcelona , Munich , Rome , Milan and in other big cities. In the future I will travel to USA because I love that Country for football , basketball and for its culture.
I' m friendly, reliable and I love meet new people...
I didn't have the opportunity to stay in foreign cauntry, alone without my family.